The weebness is achingly strong here, but overall I liked the visual style. Could do with more substance, though, besides being a standard PSA.
The weebness is achingly strong here, but overall I liked the visual style. Could do with more substance, though, besides being a standard PSA.
Fucking Chris doing Chaz. I was really hoping that I'd see his name in the credits. He did great, I can barely recognise his voice. Dialogue was pretty good, but I see you're struggling with the full-body animations. I was/am the same way when I started animating I surprisingly got pretty good at efficient mouth flaps, but struggled a lot with characters moving around. Keep practising and use reference videos of yourself/others doing the motions.
The legend has returned. Not bad. Wish it ended better.
I'm gonna say the same thing when I pass away
It's the ending. I can tell it's hard to continue making this style of sequencing in your cartoons and make it funny every time. This one was holding up, but the ending was just too abrupt. Should've squeezed in at least one more joke to make it feel conclusive, even for a cold ending.
Just a quick note: I'm happy to hear Mick voice acting, but you two sound 95% the same, so voice direction/casting needs another check.
I agree. That was my mistake. I tried to make it a father son dynamic, but I agree with what you are saying. Should pitched my voice higher
I'm gonna agree with Joeseph Starr's review below me. I like these characters and their voice acting is spot-on. You have the set-up 100% but you keep posting these tiny animations that go nowhere. Even if it's not smut, you can still make fun, sizable cartoons with them. Like, 40 seconds or something.
I recommend you take more time in the drawing board. Past few cartoons have had no substance.
While I agree that i should take more time on them, im a little confused by what you mean? "no substance" the joke being that Naruto and idolizes and obsessives over someone that clearly doesnt care for him. That being said maybe you havent seen the show? But all and all i dont think the point of my cartoons are to have tons of narative substance, but to more so to celebrate making goofy toons. Thanks for the feedback.
Gonna be honest. The script wasn't very good. I love dumb parodies probably more than the next person, but so many have been made over the years with this exact kind of execution where there aren't really any jokes and they rely entirely on "wacky" delivery of lines that it's just gotten old. There needs to be more substance. The visuals and voice acting were pretty good, and I love the title card, but that's about it for me.
Alright, here's the deal.
With your cartoons, after the first one or two I've seen, they all seem to run a similar route of "lol funny" disfigured caricatures of cartoons in very inappropriate dialogue. As such, the first 30 or so seconds of this I was pretty underwhelmed. Same gross-out factor designs and tongue-in-cheek voices and script. Shortly after, the whole thing took off thanks to the script. What you actually wrote here for Yami is really funny for some reason thanks in part to his grave delivery of it all. The joke trap card especially was very sneaky and well played (eh HEH HEH). With subsequent views, this cartoon gets funnier each time. I'm not going to tell you how to make your cartoons, but I would pay extra attention to the dialogue like you did here to really suck us into it unlike other generic face-value "lOoK aT tHeSe WaCkY cHaRaCtErS" poops other people make.
Just a note: between the intro and credits, the animation plays twice. I assume it's an error.
Yeah... it was intentional. Sorry
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